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I used to walk comfortably within
     the     spaces     between     phrases
Taking time to rest during conversation

                                        pauses.

Finding them to be places where I would
   collect
                                 my
                                            scattered
                thoughts

I was at peace in those places
A little scornful of those who felt the need to
filleveryspacewithwordslestsilenceoverwh elmthem

Yet now those moments of quiet do not offer comfort
They are a trap for my mind
Catching my tongue, stealing my thoughts
Leaving me alone, struggling as
                                           the
                                           weight
                                           of
                                           silence
                                           descends

I must relearn the art of speech-rest
Allow it not to rob my of ideas, but
   to cleanse my mind of unnecessary information
   and allow the ever-moving current of my thought-process
   to rest in the eddies of quiet contemplation
:iconfiresorceresschaotic:

Author's Comments

I am constantly thinking ahead, and one thing I think about is conversations I might have with people who I'm going to see in the near future.
Not long ago I was a little uncertain about spending time with one particular person, because I was scared I might not have enough to say.
I'd written a poem similar to this in my head at that point, but I neglected to put in on paper, so this is what I came up with this time.

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:iconblacher:
I love it

the emphasis is fantastic

IthinkIshouldjuststopusingspacecauseit'smorefuntoreaditlikethis.

Harder to write, though.

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Bite me. Very hard. Right there.
:iconfiresorceresschaotic:
I know...hitting the spacebar is do damn automatic.

You'rerightthoughitsalotmorefun.

Thanks!

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Patriotism means agreeing with your country all the time, and with your government when they deserve it - Mark Twain
:iconbellicosebreakfast:
Yay!

Awesome...placement? I forget what it's called when you have the words down differently than one after another, line after line. Anyway, it's awesome.

's a gooder.
:iconfiresorceresschaotic:
Thank you!

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Patriotism means agreeing with your country all the time, and with your government when they deserve it - Mark Twain
:iconignis-vir:
This is cool, I like how the format is scrambled on purpose. It's fun to read this way! :+fav:

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"Unfortunately, most of my inspiration comes from life and and the Internet."
-me

=Writers-Club
:iconfiresorceresschaotic:
Thanks. I hardly ever write poems with that kind of all-over-the-place format, but it's a lot of fun when I do.
Thanks for the fave!

--
Patriotism means agreeing with your country all the time, and with your government when they deserve it - Mark Twain
:iconignis-vir:
Hey, you deserve the fave.

--
"Unfortunately, most of my inspiration comes from life and and the Internet."
-me

=Writers-Club

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